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Looking for criticism on another song I made..

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Last time I did this (http://www.buckeyeplanet.com/forum/...low-buckeye-fans-i-request-your-feedback.html) I received some very helpful PMs, the end result was much better. So I figured I'd turn to BP again for more suggestions and comments. Let me know what you think. :biggrin:

Anyways, it's very similar to the last song, which is what I was going for. I'd like to make about 10 songs that could mesh well together as a part of something larger. Not sure what that would be, but time will tell.

Here's the song: YouSendIt - Send large files - transfer delivery - FTP Replacement

Thanks in advance.
 
O.K., I know very little about music terms, theory, etc....so take my opinion fwiw, and excuse my inability to describe what I'm trying to say well: :wink2:

First off, not bad at all. Very pleasant. My only criticism would be to say that each componant of the music seemed to me made up of very 'stand alone', 'stop & go' notes. The percussion & background piano sounded like the most flowing part of the song which left me feeling like it wasn't tied together enough.

I understand that the simple piano notes are the focus of the song, but to me all the stop n go effect with the other componants left me feeling that the song was a bit too broken apart, if you can understand what I mean.

Maybe if the background strings were more of a continuous progression from note to note, swelling and falling in the background without any breaks, that would tie it together for me and set apart the other componants a little better as well.

my2cents
 
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I agree a lot with Padraig on the percussion aspect. I'd like to hear it with less use of the crash cymbal.

As for the melody itself, its very well written. I like the progression and the accompanying base line. The strings give the song a very "full" sound.

With the crash cymbal so prevalent, and the upbeat tempo, I could imagine this song playing in the background during an intense movie scene.

Kudos.
 
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Padraig;1186783; said:
O.K., I know very little about music terms, theory, etc....so take my opinion fwiw, and excuse my inability to describe what I'm trying to say well: :wink2:

First off, not bad at all. Very pleasant. My only criticism would be to say that each componant of the music seemed to me made up of very 'stand alone', 'stop & go' notes. The percussion & background piano sounded like the most flowing part of the song which left me feeling like it wasn't tied together enough.

I understand that the simple piano notes are the focus of the song, but to me all the stop n go effect with the other componants left me feeling that the song was a bit too broken apart, if you can understand what I mean.

Maybe if the background strings were more of a continuous progression from note to note, swelling and falling in the background without any breaks, that would tie it together for me and set apart the other componants a little better as well.

my2cents
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That was the main problem with the other song I posted on here. After listening to it over and over again for hours while writing it, stuff like this is difficult to notice. I think I know what I can do to fix that. :biggrin:

Thanks for the comments so far.

(And by the way, I write these songs on my computer with a couple music programs)
 
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I would like the song better I think if there was somewhat of a bridge starting at the 1:45 mark, something a little off from the original melody, something to split the song up a bit, because the melody is so mellow it gets rather dull by the end in my opinion

the melody is nice no doubt, so build up with it to the 1:45 mark or so, but instead of adding to the original melody with some extra parts, kick in with something new for a bit, and then fade back to the original melody for the close... that's what my entirely unprofessional opinion is

awesome job though
 
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replace some of the crashes.... its kinda much.

I would have just said a simple snare sound, up until you come out of the piano solo @ 1:46. Then use the crash.

edit: I do love the outro. From 2:55 - end. Very simple and blended. I however wouldn't end the song so abrupt.
 
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